Spencer park

W.A.L.T Write an information report that informs the audience.

Spencer park

Success Criteria

I know I will be successful when….

• I use an opening statement that explains the subject of the report.

• The opening statement is followed by sentences that describe the event; what you saw, what you did, how you felt, what you learnt.
• Each paragraph focuses on a different aspect of the topic; travelling, the beach, the lagoon walk, playground.
• A general statement about the topic usually rounds off the report.

Last Friday Ako Ngatahi went to Spencer park. Then when we got to Spencer we lined up in a line. We all had a numbers on our hand. So every person that had number 1,2,,3,4,5 or 6. If I had number 2 then I have to be in number 2’s group. What activity we did at Spencer park was walking to the beach, playing on the playground and walking around the park.

What my group started on was walking down the beach. What we had to at the beach was  that we had to find special. Then after we walked dowed the beach my group went to the playground. What I did on the playground was that I played on the flying fox. The people I played with was ranit, Jullien,Vann,Nature and Axle. Then secondly my group got to go on a very long walk. The walk was like miles away from the place we were at. I was walking beside a friend of mine. His name was Ranit. I was proud of myself and Ranit because we didn't stop when we were walking. When we walked me and Ranit were very tired. After we walked we walked back to the park.

27.3.17

When me and my group got back to the park we got to have free time. Me, Nature, Vann, Jullien and Mikayla played basketball. There was a person that is very good at basketball. Well we were playing me and Nature got a 3 pointer. Me and Nature and our team had a good defence. The team was Hornby Primary school vs South hornby school. Hornby Primary school was leading by 16 points. A guy in south hornby school was too good and that person had lots and lots of skills. The guys name was Jurl. Jurl was going for a 3 pointer but team hornby primary school had to go back there school. Me, Nature, Lasa and mikayla had to go back in Nature's car back to hornby primary school. We all got to have fruit. Lasa had ate and i ate one palm and 1 apple and Mikayla ate like 5 or 7 palms.

ME, the space chimp...Draft

This is my first draft. We have been learning about space chimps for writing. We had to write stuff about the space chimp. Like how it landed on earth and how he woke up in space. I have been working hard on writing this story. I am proud of myself because I put lot of details in my story.

W.A.L.T write a narrative

Success Criteria

I know I will be successful when….

• The title is suitable for the text.

• The orientation tells who the story is about, and when and where the story happened.
• The complication describes a problem and explains what happened next.
• The resolution explains how the problem was solved.
• Seeks feedback and makes changes to texts to improve clarity and meaning.

5.4.3.2.1 BANG!!!!  The rocket ship went up into space I have left this planet. I have woken up, finally I'm in space.  I was chosen from all the other chimps to go in the rocket  to space in 1961. I was in space sleeping for 65 years, then I woke up and there were stars everywhere around me.

My name is Isaac and i'm a space chimp. All those years ago I had a trainer  and my trainer’s name was Ollie.  I have lost him I have been trying to find him. Back in 1961 I was very little but now I am very old.

Back in 1961 all chimps said that I was precious to them, but I had to go up into space . While I  was in space I could see a blue and green planet it might be earth. I have been waiting for this moment I am ready to land. I miss my chimps from 1961.

However the problem was that I got sent to space. I want to go back to my old planet. I think I got sent to space so that I can find my owner. He might be in earth I hope he is. I decided to go back to my old planet earth. I can’t wait to land.

While I was in space there were no  air but I could still breath because i'm in the rocket ship the beautiful sunshine lighted up in my face I am very cold but now i’m hot.I have survived in space lucky me. Ahhhhhhhh!!!!! I’m shaking I think it’s a earthquake it looks like I have not  survived yet.My rocket ship is Braking as i fly back through earths atmosphere.

My rocket ship is broken.I'm in a country in earth I  can see nobody it’s like they hate me or something.  There is one tear coming down my eye I am so sad I can't find my owner nobody is here .It’s scary and freaky and very cold. I hope I find my owner. I think all people have left this country. It is boring here there are only buildings and trees.

My name is Isaac and i'm a space chimp. All those years ago I had a trainer  and my trainer’s name was Ollie.  I have lost him I have been trying to find him. Back in 1961 I was very little but now I am very old. I live in a different planet it is better than this planet because it has more people. There are broken buildings and this country is a this earth is Destroyed. It’s boring here because there are no one here, they probably hiding I feel like i'm in a destroyed book There are

I hate this country it looks like i'm going have to live here without food or drink. This country is damaged I wish I was in a different country there are no leaves on the tree. The sky is grey .

I am always going to remember my chimps. And I am always going to remember the year I was little in 1961. I miss my family I hope they're having fun. I will come back to my old planet. There might be animals in this country. I hope my chimps come to this country in earth. I will try to find a airplane to fly to a another country that has food and drink and trees with leaves and building that are not Destroyed and with nice blue and white sky.

The Buffalo and the Lion. (First Draft)

W.A.L.T recall  events through the eyes of an animal

Success Criteria

I know I will be successful when my recount has a

• Title
• Orientation:  When? Who? Where? Why?
• Sequence of events:  What happened? Describe using the senses (hear, taste, see,          smell and feel).
• Personal Comment:  How did the events make you feel?   

First Draft

The animal battle

It’s a beautiful day in south Africa.  We were lying out in the nice afternoon  in the sun waiting for some buffalos to come so we can eat them up because we are hungry!. But we are going to chase the calf buffalo because it’s week at running.When the buffalos come we are all going to hunt down one of the buffaloes.when we got the baby buffalo the crocodile tried to take my family's lunch.

(The Buffalos And LIONS)

Some little and big calves were  walking down my river bank . And we were waiting and waiting  for them to come closer and closer then we will hunt one of them but we are going after the small one because It’s Week at running but we are fast at running. We are excited to go and get the calv. Yeay!!  we got the calve  let’s eat now. Guys we can’t eat if a crocodile is trying to steal our dinner. Me and my brothers are going to have a of fight  with the crocodile. We won we can eat now. I hear something stomping. I see a herd of buffalo coming to us. I think they came because we ate one of the buffalos. I am trying to run away because a herd of buffalos are chasing me. I thourt i was going to die. I  smell buffalos . When me and my brothers ate one of the buffalos it tasted like deelishis.  My brothers are get hurt from the buffalos i might go and  save them before my mum and dad come and go ruff on the buffalos. I saved my brothers.… The END.

The Buffalo and the Lion. (First Draft)

W.A.L.T recall  events through the eyes of an animal

Success Criteria

I know I will be successful when my recount has a

• Title
• Orientation:  When? Who? Where? Why?
• Sequence of events:  What happened? Describe using the senses (hear, taste, see,          smell and feel).
• Personal Comment:  How did the events make you feel?   

First Draft

The animal battle

It’s a beautiful day in south Africa.  We were lying out in the nice afternoon  in the sun waiting for some buffalos to come so we can eat them up because we are hungry!. But we are going to chase the calf buffalo because it’s week at running.When the buffalos come we are all going to hunt down one of the buffaloes.when we got the baby buffalo the crocodile tried to take my family's lunch.

(The Buffalos And LIONS)

Some little and big calves were  walking down my river bank . And we were waiting and waiting  for them to come closer and closer then we will hunt one of them but we are going after the small one because It’s Week at running but we are fast at running. We are excited to go and get the calv. Yeay!!  we got the calve  let’s eat now. Guys we can’t eat if a crocodile is trying to steal our dinner. Me and my brothers are going to have a of fight  with the crocodile. We won we can eat now. I hear something stomping. I see a herd of buffalo coming to us. I think they came because we ate one of the buffalos. I am trying to run away because a herd of buffalos are chasing me. I thourt i was going to die. I  smell buffalos . When me and my brothers ate one of the buffalos it tasted like deelishis.  My brothers are get hurt from the buffalos i might go and  save them before my mum and dad come and go ruff on the buffalos. I saved my brothers.… The END.