The Buffalo and the Lion. (First Draft)

W.A.L.T recall  events through the eyes of an animal

Success Criteria

I know I will be successful when my recount has a

• Title
• Orientation:  When? Who? Where? Why?
• Sequence of events:  What happened? Describe using the senses (hear, taste, see,          smell and feel).
• Personal Comment:  How did the events make you feel?   

First Draft

The animal battle

It’s a beautiful day in south Africa.  We were lying out in the nice afternoon  in the sun waiting for some buffalos to come so we can eat them up because we are hungry!. But we are going to chase the calf buffalo because it’s week at running.When the buffalos come we are all going to hunt down one of the buffaloes.when we got the baby buffalo the crocodile tried to take my family's lunch.

(The Buffalos And LIONS)

Some little and big calves were  walking down my river bank . And we were waiting and waiting  for them to come closer and closer then we will hunt one of them but we are going after the small one because It’s Week at running but we are fast at running. We are excited to go and get the calv. Yeay!!  we got the calve  let’s eat now. Guys we can’t eat if a crocodile is trying to steal our dinner. Me and my brothers are going to have a of fight  with the crocodile. We won we can eat now. I hear something stomping. I see a herd of buffalo coming to us. I think they came because we ate one of the buffalos. I am trying to run away because a herd of buffalos are chasing me. I thourt i was going to die. I  smell buffalos . When me and my brothers ate one of the buffalos it tasted like deelishis.  My brothers are get hurt from the buffalos i might go and  save them before my mum and dad come and go ruff on the buffalos. I saved my brothers.… The END.